Some of them are, yeah, not what I got here, but... [ shrug, they make do with what they have ] I can come over and show you if you want? Working on the song would be easier in person too -
Well, we start looking for rhymes, I think. Rhyme and rhythm is what makes a song - it does not have to rhyme, of course, especially not if the rhytm is good! But it does help, particularly if you want it to be catchy!
So, I was thining, maybe somthing to begin with like...
I knew a girl, a clever girl, From a town of cold and rain Oh she smiled at me, and she laughed at me, But our hearts they were the same.
Her eyes were bright, her tongue was sharp Her mind of quicksilver made Oh she smiled at me, and she argued with me And we love the same video games
Oh well done! I hardly think you need me, Winn, if you can pull together a verse like that! The last line runs a little uneven, but I think we can forgive that, as I cannot see a way around it, yet.
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Date: 2017-03-27 02:56 pm (UTC)Yes, you could contrast those, and the best songs tend to be quite short! You will have to explain video games to me, however!
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Date: 2017-03-29 02:19 pm (UTC)You have it here?
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Date: 2017-04-05 12:26 pm (UTC)New things are always interesting! And yes, it probably would, eh?
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Date: 2017-04-13 12:56 pm (UTC)[ Maglor will be waiting, already humming softly to himself as he works on a tune ]
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Date: 2017-04-13 01:07 pm (UTC)Hi - that sounds pretty.
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Date: 2017-04-15 04:30 am (UTC)"Hello Winn. I am glad you like it! I wanted something with a simple, catchy refrain. Think you this one will do?"
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Date: 2017-04-17 03:42 am (UTC)I think it'll do great, thanks again for helping me with this -
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Date: 2017-04-18 07:44 am (UTC)"Besides, you know how much I love music - this sort of thing is fun!
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Date: 2017-04-19 09:20 am (UTC)How do we start working on lyrics?
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Date: 2017-04-25 02:18 pm (UTC)So, I was thining, maybe somthing to begin with like...
I knew a girl, a clever girl,
From a town of cold and rain
Oh she smiled at me, and she laughed at me,
But our hearts they were the same.
Her eyes were bright, her tongue was sharp
Her mind of quicksilver made
Oh she smiled at me, and she argued with me
And we love the same video games
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Date: 2017-04-27 09:58 am (UTC)That is amazing - you're a genius. Okay - let me try - [ he clears his throat and thinks for a moment before singing to the same tune. ]
I knew a girl, a studious girl
This gift she'll probably hate
The lyrics are too easy to analyze
And the score was written after 1798.
How's that?
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Date: 2017-04-27 02:28 pm (UTC)Oh well done! I hardly think you need me, Winn, if you can pull together a verse like that! The last line runs a little uneven, but I think we can forgive that, as I cannot see a way around it, yet.
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Date: 2017-04-27 02:29 pm (UTC)[ so much grinning at the compliment though. ]
I definitely need you, though, that tune is inspiring.
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Date: 2017-04-28 05:45 pm (UTC)[ n u d g e ]
Okay um - how's this? [ he clears his throat and sings ]
I knew a girl, a brilliant girl,
And as luck has it I know her still
As I string words together she surely will scoff
But it won't change how I feel
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Date: 2017-04-29 10:59 am (UTC)Oh well done! An excellent verse.
She likes to read and she likes to learn,
She likes to teach me too!
Oh her smiles are bright,
And her eyes are sharp
But her mind is sharper still!
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Date: 2017-04-29 11:30 am (UTC)Though her appearance misleading may be
There is no kinder soul than this little nerd
[ he pauses, trying to figure out how to rhyme this ]
Please forgive me, I must now flee?
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Date: 2017-04-29 01:02 pm (UTC)An excellent ending, and one that will prove propehtic, I fear, although you will not long be able to evade her on these ships!
Although I think you might want to try Please forgive me for now I must flee and see if it scans better
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